For my second revision, I’m going to try some repetition (along with some alliteration).
It’s a snow day!
It’s March.
Almost spring.
The robins should be returning.
Daffodils should be dancing,
But not today.
It’s a snow day!
Before I even open my eyes, I know it is snowing.
Barely a sound outside.
A hush over the world.
Everything muffled by the fluffy white stuff falling gracefully from the sky.
I open my eyes.
Look out the window.
The back yard covered with a blanket, tree branches lined in white chalk.
It’s a snow day!
The texts have come.
Emails too.
No school today.
A day for projects.
A day to read.
A day to write.
It’s a snow day!
It’s March.
Almost spring.
The robins should be returning.
Daffodils should be dancing,
But not today.
It’s a snow day!
Writing to Learn, Learning to Write 
I love this! The repetition in the first and last stanzas…we feel this way. And yet, there’s positivity too..time for projects, etc. I love the line “tree branches covered in white chalk”… a teacher’s line!
I’m loving watching your revision work. The repetition is perfect here!
Great poem. There are a bunch of lines I love:
Barely a sound outside.
A hush over the world.
AND
tree branches lined in white chalk
That last one is perfect. I love that lmage (in the poem and in real life), which is also the most fleeting of the snow images.
It’s great to watch a poem grow, too. Thanks for the drafts.
When you’re done, you’ll have a little snow anthologies… they don’t keep getting better…they’re all beautiful in their own way.
This one seems to be the most playful! Love the use of repetition! I am thoroughly enjoying your revision work! Revision is simply reseeing what it there and you are on it! Thanks for sharing!
I’m enjoying the revision too! I agree with Jess…I’m not sure they are getting better, but they are different. Maybe I’ll give it one more try tomorrow.