Snow Poetry – Revision #2

For my second revision, I’m going to try some repetition (along with some alliteration).

 

It’s a snow day!

 

It’s March.

Almost spring.

The robins should be returning.

Daffodils should be dancing,

But not today.

It’s a snow day!

 

Before I even open my eyes, I know it is snowing.

Barely a sound outside.

A hush over the world.

Everything muffled by the fluffy white stuff falling gracefully from the sky.

I open my eyes.

Look out the window.

The back yard covered with a blanket, tree branches lined in white chalk.

It’s a snow day!

 

The texts have come.

Emails too.

No school today.

A day for projects.

A day to read.

A day to write.

It’s a snow day!

 

It’s March.

Almost spring.

The robins should be returning.

Daffodils should be dancing,

But not today.

It’s a snow day!

 

 

 

 

6 thoughts on “Snow Poetry – Revision #2”

  1. I love this! The repetition in the first and last stanzas…we feel this way. And yet, there’s positivity too..time for projects, etc. I love the line “tree branches covered in white chalk”… a teacher’s line!

  2. Great poem. There are a bunch of lines I love:
    Barely a sound outside.

    A hush over the world.
    AND
    tree branches lined in white chalk
    That last one is perfect. I love that lmage (in the poem and in real life), which is also the most fleeting of the snow images.
    It’s great to watch a poem grow, too. Thanks for the drafts.

  3. This one seems to be the most playful! Love the use of repetition! I am thoroughly enjoying your revision work! Revision is simply reseeing what it there and you are on it! Thanks for sharing!

  4. I’m enjoying the revision too! I agree with Jess…I’m not sure they are getting better, but they are different. Maybe I’ll give it one more try tomorrow.

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